I didn’t know she was dying…

Beautiful, soft, delicate
Creative, smart and witty!
Everyone loved her
But noone knew she was dying

They loved the way she made her cookies
They loved how she cared for the little ones
They loved a lot about her
There wasn’t a complaint I tell you

But no one knew she was dying
I didn’t know she was dying

And in assuring alls pleasure
In living in all that luxure..
She died; her heart.

Much to her disappointment
There was noone this time
To help her.
Her heart was dead.
Her prayers were technical
Her soul was lost

Her heart was dead.
Save this little corner;
It still had some spark left.

She tried to lit it more
‘Indeed Allah gives life to the dead heart’
So she tried; she yearned for life

Noone longs for a heart of life
More than one whose has been dead!

So she longed for it
She strove for it
And His promise ever remained true…

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About Sameera Hameed

The Meadows. Dawn. And a Pen. From a Soul that longs for its long lost Abode..
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3 Responses to I didn’t know she was dying…

  1. Yacoob says:

    Lovely poem.

    Not to nitpick, but “noone” just looks odd…

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    • Oh! Thanks for that! Any suggestions to fix it? Honestly i wrote this half asleep n just posted it without any edits or pictures etc

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      • Yacoob says:

        Just punctuation I think. And paragraph 4 has 2 errors (“alls”) and one more.

        Don’t change the content other than that. I always feel what comes naturally is best – not a fan of editing creative pieces unless there are glaring issues

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